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poems I - sorrow, melancholy, and the self by shehrozeameen


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Was it worth it?
Trading the taste of cinnamon on your lips
To smell like cigarettes and a painful hangover.

Was life so cruel to your perfectly skewed smile,
That you had to swallow a bottle of brandy
Every night at 9 pm
To hear yourself laugh again?

How could I have not noticed
The tremor in your right hand
Every time you held a pen?
Was I so blind for the love you had for me to see
That my love was destroying you?

'I am yours.' You whispered when you still had Petrichor surrounding you.
I inhaled your scent like oxygen,
All the while I suffocated you like sulfur.

You gave me your heart on a plate,
And I was the last pill that took your life away from you too.

Mother always told me I broke the things I had
Because that is how I was;
Selfish and undeserving.
I didn't deserve you.
You,
You weren't supposed to be mine.
I just don't know. :shrug:
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Dreamworld88 Featured By Owner Mar 24, 2014  Student Writer
I enjoy this a lot. I like your word choices.
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slipcast-chrysalism Featured By Owner Mar 25, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank youu! :heart:
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shehrozeameen Featured By Owner Mar 23, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
:) :clap: This work, is so freaking true I swear... Its like you took life stories I've heard so often, put them into a very well defined story, and left the reader to side with whoever they choose to do so. To me, it is built on an openness in the sense that its slice of life - Most of the elements in it are well handled in my point of view, and I liked it immediately after I read it.

I mean it, by the way. Well done :clap:
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slipcast-chrysalism Featured By Owner Mar 23, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you so much! :heart:  
I'm really glad you liked it! :aww:  :tighthug:
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shehrozeameen Featured By Owner Mar 23, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
:) I sent you a note too.
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NotenSMSK Featured By Owner Mar 21, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I like it... the message is different in perspective and well written - however you left the story for the reader to determine. I love expressions used and while the last portion of: "Mother told me..." has been used before and I knew what  mother said but it still suits :) Over all quite an amazing piece. Btw what is  Petrichor? 
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slipcast-chrysalism Featured By Owner Mar 21, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you! :)

I'm sorry, but where did i use 'mother told me' before? ^^;

thank you so much! :hug:

Petrichor is the scent of rain on dry earth. 

The literal exact definition. 
pleasant smell that frequently accompanies the first rain after a long period of warm, dry weather.  :meow:

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NotenSMSK Featured By Owner Mar 21, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
You are welcome :) And you didn't use it before - it has been used by other people :nod:

You are very welcome :)

Ah... that is a unique word!
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slipcast-chrysalism Featured By Owner Mar 21, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
I honestly wasn't aware. ^^;

indeed it is. :) 
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NotenSMSK Featured By Owner Mar 21, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
It is not something you should have been aware of :) It is totally fine - I was just saying that it is something I have read so while I cannot say it is completely original, it is well written :)
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