Just Friends

I don't mean to be cruel - only constructive, so please don't be disheartened. I'm only trying to help you.

What you're trying to get across is clear, but it's huge clarity is what makes the piece simple and not very captivating. This is largely because the imagery is extremely cliche.

There are very few techniques used (of them, only imagery is really present), and a simple rhythm, adding to its mediocrity.

It is clear that you wrote this from the heart, so there is a emotional effect, but there is nothing strong that binds the emotions together, in order for them to be completely projected through the piece.

Poetry is a way of capturing emotions, in a similar way a camera captures images. You need to use a variety of techniques, words, and symbolism, in order to even be average in this art form.

It's probably the most difficult style of writing, because there are so many things to take into account (even at times, simplicity in a specific area such as rhythm can produce a intense effect, but only if it's used in certain ways).

Rhythm is probably the most important thing you have to consider, as this is what controls the voice of the author, and is a huge contributor to the moods in a poem.

For instance, at the beginning of the poem, "You look at him, He looks at you." utilises short statements which create a slight sense of building tension. If you exchanged the comma at the end of the first line for a period, this effect would have been much greater - as the slightly more extended pause allows time for the words to sink in and affect the audiences mood that little bit more. (The very last line is actually the best example of this too, even the shrinking in font size adds to the effect of the small but painfully ever-present fear of that idea being a reality [the bold "We're just friends." gives a sense of obtrusiveness, as if it's something you don't want to hear, and it relates back to the title)].

Writing one. Word. Sentences. as another example, can create feelings of irritation, anger, fear, tension, and many others. These are only some examples, there are so many ways you can use spaces, periods, commas, colons, etc. for creating and adjusting the rhythm.

Thinking of a beat or imagining your words being sung can help you better this, as poetry is more like a song then a narrative.

I also recommend you begin learning a plethora of new words.
Whenever you come across a new word, look it up, and try to use it in regular speech/writing in order to remember it.
Even looking up a word a day, or looking on dictionary.com's word of the day each day, will slowly help you build up a greater vocabulary, which will give you the ability to use many descriptive words, and create unique images, original metaphors, and open the way to new and more subtle and powerful techniques.

One final thing, remember that if poetry is a way of capturing emotions, you have to try and get the audience to feel what you're feeling - and experience themselves the emotions you have inside you. People could relate to this piece emotionally because they've been in similar circumstances, but I have not been in a situation like this, and thus in order to feel how you feel, you would have to write so that words essentially leak your feelings out from every corner.

If someone looks at a picture you've taken, they can see exactly what you saw. So to write brilliant poetry, you have to get them to feel how you feel.

I wish you luck in your practice, and I sincerely hope my advice will help your writing.